Feedback Wanted for my Hack Concept/Script

Hey all, I’m new here and I’m planning a hack called Relics. I wrote out the full script of the main story, as well as an outline for map ideas and unit concepts. I would really appreciate if some people could look this over and give me some feedback and suggestions on both my writing and my gameplay ideas


I haven’t had a chance to read through the script but congratulation on hammering out 190 pages of script. Wow. I can’t even do that. Will try to leave some feedback if I get the time.